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Post by Michelle Mackenzie (Admin) on Mar 24, 2011 9:47:39 GMT 1
CUT:
Detective Grain stood over the crime scene, frowning. The police Doctor, Dr Melody Steel stood up from the soil.
DR. STEEL Same as the others I'm afraid. Time of death is about midnight.
DETECTIVE *Sigh* This is the second murder this week!
There was a moment of silence as the cause of death sunk in.
DETECTIVE Wait... She died the same?
DR. STEEL Yes. Like the other woman, she had been hung- and then buried after death.
DETECTIVE GRAIN and DR. STEEL looked sadly at the victim on the ground. The woman had long blonde hair and green blood shot eyes. Her long faded yellow dress was torn and holey, no doubt from being buried.
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What you think?
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Post by Erosaf on Mar 24, 2011 9:52:59 GMT 1
interesting, though you might want to make it longer.. lol
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Post by Michelle Mackenzie (Admin) on Mar 24, 2011 10:00:58 GMT 1
Im just making sure I got the format right. lol.
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Post by Erosaf on Mar 24, 2011 10:09:50 GMT 1
yes you did... very quick learner aren't you here?
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Post by Michelle Mackenzie (Admin) on Mar 24, 2011 10:21:24 GMT 1
Hehe, yep. One of my best qualities about me. I will continue to read up on it though. LOL
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